Do you want to be safe?

This is mine and Heaven’s first persuasive writing. Read it and comment if i persuaded you.

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we am learning to organise my ideas with the support of a provided planning template.

By Rangimarie And Iverson

We believe that we need cameras in our school. Would you like your stuff getting stolen and your kid is not using our hoe, and nothing happening about it? Do you agree or disagree?

We think that we need cameras in our school is because we want our school to be free of theft..  Aren't you just angry when your stuff  is stolen don't you just want to catch the thief.When kids come to school they will know that there are cameras monitoring what is happening in the school. For example someone could go to the hooks, take one of the bags and steal stuff out of there bag. Would you want that happening to your children/child.

Another reason why we think that we should have cameras in our school is because kids will not be breaking our Hoe Tikanga . This is because we have an awesome tikanga and the kids who are breaking these tikanga will be caught on camera this is so easier to find the thief. Added to this we should get cameras because kids will behave better and treat others in kinder ways. And for those who do the right thing they will always be rewarded.

In Summary,  I believe that we need cameras in our school.

Purely for security purposes and to keep everyone safe.

Surely everyone would want a school that is safe and secure.Let's step up and  make our school the best, number one in New Zealand Surely everyone would want a school that is safe and secure

Lets Bring cameras to our school!

Our next steps are: To be independent at using the correct strucutre for persuasive. Have well organised paragraphs with lead sentences and supporting detail. We will also learn about emotive words and phrases and how to use them to support our argument.